So - I decided to raid some of my old stories / letters, and I also asked Kaylee's permission to share her work. She had to write an "autobiographical recount rubric" and this is what she came up with. I think it is brilliant. She had me in tears. I hope you enjoy it too.
This is it:-
"I was sad, it was the day I was moving to Australia, and the
date was the 12th of July 2011. We were
moving there because my dad wanted to work at the AIS and because we wanted to
see how it feels to live somewhere different.
It was a big move from South Africa half way across the world to
Australia.
It was early in the morning we had to go to the dentist and
the doctor before the flight. We arrived
at the dentist we had to wait a while before we could go in. We got our teeth checked and the dentist said
that I might have to get braces! We said
goodbye to our dentist and went to the doctor (who by the way was in the same building
as the dentist so that made it easier) to get me and my sister and my mom checked
up. My sister and I had a bit of a cough
so he gave us some strepsils. Then we
said goodbye to my favourite doctor ever! (Dr Gerard).
Then we went back to my grannies house (because we had moved
out of our house a month ago and went to live with my granny) to get our hand
luggage packed, but we still had three hours to go. My best friend (Shazia who I had to say goodbye
to two days ago) and I were talking on the phone and we were crying, it was so
sad to say goodbye to her. Then when we
were done talking my uncle came to come and say his goodbyes to us, he gave me
a book called Mr Stink because I had lost my other book at his house. He said goodbye to me for my cousin because
she could not come with him, she was with her mom in Bronkelspruit which was
two hours away. My friend and his dad
(my godfather) came because they were the ones who were going to drop us off at
the airport. It was time to leave my
granny’s house, said goodbye to my granny (which was one of the hardest things
to do). My grandpa had died in 2010 and
now my granny would be a bit lonely.
We came to the airport (O.R Tambo) where my auntie and uncle
had come to say goodbye to us. We were
having dinner at a South African restaurant called “wimpy” (I still miss that
restaurant very much!!!) we finished dinner.
We got our Visas checked and said a very sad goodbye to my
auntie and uncle (nicki and sipho). As
the aeroplane started lifting I looked down and saw the light of Johannesburg
under us I started bawling my eyes out as I knew that were leaving our country
and family and friends, we are the first Rethmans in Australia.
The plane flight was really long and the big T.V with the
movie on it was not for kids so I decided to go to sleep. The plane landed in Perth the next morning so
we got off had something to eat and wandered around the airport. When it was time to board the plane to
Canberra we got on and the plane lifted off once again. This time the movie on the screen was a very
nice kid’s movie called: Soul Surfer.
The plane landed in Canberra and we got off. We had to rent a car to go to the guest house
we were staying in. We tried to get out
of the parking lot but the gate wouldn’t open and there was no one left in the
airport so finally after an hour of searching my dad found a security guard and
we left. While we were driving I took
in my surroundings and I thought: WOW!!!
Canberra is beautiful; it was two o’clock in the morning when we got to
our guest house in Kaleen so we went straight to sleep. I drifted deeper and deeper to sleep and I
dreamt about how much fun I am going to have in Canberra.
And now here I am in Australia, finishing off my recount."
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